Comments on: Guilt

By: Moulee

Moulee — Sat, 19 Jun 2010 20:10:41 +0000

Thank you Pal!

By: pal

pal — Sat, 19 Jun 2010 09:03:44 +0000

Very nicely written, Moulee. Makes the reader feel so sad for such little children, and equally guilty too. All of us are witness to child labour, yet we do nothing about it. Good post. The ending especially, was very REAL.

(For some critique: Like someone else has said above, even I felt the introduction of many new characters at the end does not add significant value to the story).

By: Moulee

Moulee — Sat, 19 Jun 2010 08:46:58 +0000

Thank you Gyanban.

By: Moulee

Moulee — Sat, 19 Jun 2010 08:46:13 +0000

Thank you Smitha.

By: Gyanban

Gyanban — Sat, 19 Jun 2010 05:11:51 +0000

Scene construct is nicely done,you ve captured the environment quite well.
Good job.

By: Smitha

Smitha — Fri, 18 Jun 2010 17:48:17 +0000

That was beautifully narrated, Moulee. Loved the way you ended it too!

All the best for the contest.

By: Moulee

Moulee — Thu, 17 Jun 2010 11:57:50 +0000

Thank you Neha.

By: Moulee

Moulee — Thu, 17 Jun 2010 11:57:32 +0000

Thank you Kazu.

By: Neha

Neha — Wed, 16 Jun 2010 09:17:57 +0000

Nice one Moulee..well narrated..good luck

By: Kazu

Kazu — Tue, 15 Jun 2010 19:14:23 +0000

Moulee, thats very touching ending, I like the way you narrated it. Its lucid and well-paced